Final Feedback

The feedback we received from our thriller opening was very positive. Things that were said: Wasn't to dark and the lighting added to the mood, Good use of drill, liked the garage location, maybe a bigger bowl of water so people can see clearly whats going on, soundtrack worked well with the diagetic sound to build tension, good use of drill noise with the scream, good use of voyeourism, stared web of intrigue, smooth transitions .

Feedback on 'Rough cut'

Editing: Some shots need to be cut down because they are too long.

Sound: Good use of diagetic sound but needs more non-diagetic sound.

Mise en scene: Good location, props and costume.

Narrative: Needs some transitions to break up the shots.

Reply to feedback: We will cut down the shots to make them shorter, we just haven't had enough time to cut hem down. The sound track is being finished and should be put in next lesson. We haven't decided where we will use the transitions but we will put them in as soon as we have decided where they will be most effective.

New Shot List

We decided to make a new shot list because we weren't happy with our other one. We made a new shot list for 2 main reasons. Firstly we wanted to create a better storyline and secondly it was hard to shoot the first shot list with 2 people.

New shot list:

Shot 1: Black screen - Phone message over lapping.
Shot 2: Close up of character sticking down photos.
Shot 3: Camera zooming out too a full body shot of the victim.
Shot 4: Character taking photo of tied up victim.
Shot 5: Close up of character sticking down a photo of previous shot.
Shot 6: Character brings out equipment and removes bag from victims head.
Shot 7: Character takes shot of victim.
Shot 8: Close up of character sticking down a photo of previous shot.
Shot 9: Character drowning victim whilst taking photo.
Shot 10: Close up of character sticking down a photo of previous shot.
Shot 11: Character puts a drill to victims head and the light goes out.
Shot 12: Final picture is stuck in and then put into a brown envelope.

Our idea for a thriller opening sequence

For our opening sequence we came up with one very clear idea. We decided to open it with a shot of a person putting a dvd into a dvd player. On the dvd it will show footage of a man being tortured and eventually killed. Will also cross that over with actuall shots of the torture and murder.

We decided to do this because we thought that we could fit the most thriller conventions into this sequence. We could also create alot of fear and suspense with some simple but effective shots.